A Minecraft Script I'm Reading For Gideon's Friend to Test the Snowball

My brother, Gideon, has a Minecraft forum and one of his friends asked him to read a script that he gave Gideon. Gideon read it and recorded it but Gideon said that his recording wasn't good, so he asked me to read it. I have already read it and recorded it, but I'm not sure if it's good enough (some of the words in the were made up in this story)

Tell me if you like this recording, tell me what parts I could differently:

The reason Gideon's friend wanted me to record his script is because we have a mic called the "Snow Ball" and he wasn't sure if he should get the Snow Ball so he wrote up a script and had me read it. If it recorded my voice well then he will get the Snow Ball.